Howdy Folks,
I often think
about, and write about, how living and working, or playing and learning with
our horses, and writing have so many similarities. Such as my blog,
"Horses and Writing, Similar POVs?" And "Building Confidence in a Horse and Building a Character in a Novel." Another time I wrote about
"It's About Who They Are, not What They Are," this one is my
favorites.
The other day I
was reading a writer's blog about the overuse of the word, "suddenly"
in a manuscript. Every word she said was exactly correct, and I'd hoped she
would say more. I've always found the word "suddenly" to be a speed
bump in a story or novel. Instead of propelling me with the action as the writer
intends, it stops me dead in my reading tracks. Pushes me away. In fact most
"ly" words have that effect on me. If the author replaces the
"ly" word with the action she's trying to portray, we readers can be
drawn in and feel the action. Instead of "hearing" about it. "Suddenly" for me is the worst of the "ly" words.
Here's a brief
example. "Suddenly she burst into tears." Not much there, even if we
knew why she had to cry. How about something like, "She needed to see him
again. Where was he? Why can't she find him? Sucking short breaths she tried to
be strong, but her burning eyes flooded, tears streamed down her face."
I've always found
when I'm editing and re-writing if I re-write scenes or sentences with
"ly" words the scene embraces me more. Adds depth, meaning and
emotions. Yes it will add words, but I suggest they are words that build
emotions and connection with the reader. And as writers aren't they the two
most important things? Emotions and connection.
Kessy and me sharing a moment |
In our
relationship with our horses "emotions and connection" are most
important as well. If we do anything, "suddenly" it's more than a
speed bump to our horse. It's a "failure to communicate." And as
"authors" of the moment, it's our job to "re-write the scene."
If we replace
that "ly" word, or action, with a more descriptive series of words
and actions our horse will follow us, feel the emotion, and the connection. And
our relationship will deepen.
It makes no sense
to the horse when we bark commands, jerk on the lead rope, or wave our hands
and arms. Sure we get a reaction, and that's just what it is, a reaction. It's
not a connection. It's best, even if the horse is making a mistake to follow
through that mistake, see where it takes you, then build on it. Write the scene
with easy to embrace description.
Engage your
imagination, your intuitiveness, let your horse help write the scene in a way
that embraces both of you. It'll add words, but those words make all the
difference.
Gitty Up ~ Dutch
Henry
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